2016年英語四級考試作文范文及點評一

　　Pickpocketing

　　Yesterday, I witnessed a theft incident on my way home. While waiting for a bus, a woman took her wallet out and paid for a newspaper at a nearby newspaper booth,. After putting her wallet back into her handbag she began to look through the new titles when a middle-aged man brushed past her muttering “Excuse me”. Swiftly, her wallet was in the man’s hand.

　　The crazy pickpocketing has become a national epidemic and poses a grave threat to the residents’ and visitors’ property safety. Pickpocketing prevention, which is a tough task for police, makes senses. All sides involved in this problem must join their efforts to remove this social cancer.

　　Everyone shares the huge responsibility for demonstrating their justice at proper time. Personal responsibility is vital to build a harmonious society.

　　點評

　　描述一次親眼目睹的事實，一次引出全文的主題。Witness用詞準確。Brush此處為動詞，說明小偷推擠的動作想說子拂過般既輕又快，描述生動形象。含有諷刺意味的Swiftly與句中的動詞brush呼應(yīng)，自然承接前一句。

　　指出扒竊行為的危害，crazy，National epidemic和poses a grave threat to等詞表現(xiàn)出此危害的嚴重性。Tough和句中的比喻social cancer意在譴責此類卑劣行徑。

　　最后兩句話呼吁大家攜手努力，消除扒竊，共建和諧社會，點明文章主題。